December 26, 2009

Bahar Nahin Aata

दिल दर्द के लगान से बाहर नहीं आता

ये क़र्ज़ है किसान से बाहर नहीं आता



हर वक़्त वाह वाहियाँ चाहा करे कोई

तारीफ़ की थकान से बाहर नहीं आता



मैं रूह की बातें लिये दहलीज़ पे खड़ा

तू जिस्म के मकान से बाहर नहीं आता



जो लफ्ज़ तार तार सा होंठों पे है बिछा

वो तीर है कमान से बाहर नहीं आता



बेख़ौफ़ है ज़मीर से वो जानता है कि

मुर्दा क़बरिस्तान से बाहर नहीं आता



तू क़त्ल कर कसूर ना मेरा मुझे बता

कि मैं कभी कुरआन से बाहर नहीं आता



बेफ़िक्रियाँ ख़रीद के “कामिल” औलाद की

बेफ़िकर मैं दुकान से बाहर नहीं आता



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Dil dard ke lagan se bahar nahin aata

Ye karz hai kisaan se bahar nahin aata


Har waqt wah wahiyan chaaha kare koi

Tareef ki thakaan se bahar nahin aata


Main rooh ki batein liye dehleez pe khada

Tu jism ke makaan se bahar nahin aata


Jo lafz taar taar sa honthon pe hai bichha

Vo teer hai kamaan se bahar nahin aata


Bekhauf hai zameer se vo Jaanta hai ke

Murda kabristaan se bahar nahin aata


Tu qatal kar kasoor na mera mujhe bata

Ki main kabhi qur’aan se bahar nahin aata


Befikriyan khareed ke “Kamil” aulaad ki

Befikar main dukaan se bahar nahin aata



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4 responses to “Bahar Nahin Aata”

  1. mehnazjaved says:

    Bahut hi behtareen Ghazal Likhi Hai Kamil Sahib.Shuruaat aisi ki hai ke,ki Soch unhi Lafzon main ulajh ke reh Jaati hai..Dil Dard Ke Lagaan….Wah Bahut Khoob likha hai.
    Aray Janaab kaise likhte ho itni Gaharai se..kya Shair likha hai “Main Rooh ki Baaten liye Dehleez Pe Khada, Tu jism ke Makaan se Bahar Nahi Aata.”
    Kamaal hai Sir.Ek Ek Shair apne aap main ek DEEWAAN samete hai..Makte main kya Haqeeqat se aashna Karwa diya. “Befikar Main Dukaan…..”Bahut Umdah hai.Really You are Matchless.

  2. Savita S. says:

    Bahut hi behtreen Ghazal hai. Ek ek she’r sochne par theharne par majboor karta hai.ye she’r ” Main rooh ki batein liye dehleez pe khada
    Tu jism ke makaan se bahar nahin aata’ best she’r hai. There are people who feels physical requirement is love. Sorry for those. Aur akhiri She’r is reality of life. Kamaal hain aap.

  3. Rajni Malik says:

    Wah…Wah…main to baar baar padhne ko majboor ho rahi hun.

  4. Irshad Kamil says:

    Mohd Adnan, Irm Zafar, Ajay Kanagat and 22 others like this.

    Neelesh Misra
    irshad, this is stunning piece of writing! in both craft and soul … congratulations, what a pleasure … thanks for sharing
    September 16 at 11:16pm · Like

    Irshad Kamil
    Ohh…thanks Nilesh I just frgt to tag u…Hope u r doing gr8.
    September 16 at 11:17pm · Like

    Neelesh Misra
    I am well, am moving to Bombay. Baithte hain kabhi, mehfil jamegi …
    September 16 at 11:18pm · Like

    Harish Bhatia
    Yes,Irshad;It’a breakthrough;keep it up!!And,if possible,get it set to music!!
    September 16 at 11:20pm · Like

    Mumtaz Naza
    Wah waah Kamil Sahab
    main rooh ki baaten liye dahleez pe khada
    tu jism ke makaan se baahar nahin aata
    kya khoob, kya kehne
    jo lafz taar taar sa honton pe hai bichha
    wo teer hai kamaan se bahar nahin aata
    lajawaab
    September 16 at 11:21pm · Like · 1 person

    Irshad Kamil ‎@ Sure Neelesh.

    @ Harish sir Jagjit Bhai gayenge na 🙂

    @ Thank u so much Mumtaz Ji…I am humbled.
    September 16 at 11:27pm · Like · 1 person

    Rahul Tripathi
    kya bat hai,i also like u as a lyricist.
    September 16 at 11:34pm · Like

    Aslam Assu
    waah waah irshad kamil sahab kya kehne bohat khoob,bohat hi umda,laajwaab kalaam hai,khush aabad rahein
    September 16 at 11:34pm · Like

    Parvez Akhtar
    bahut hi umda shayri bahut pasand ayee
    September 16 at 11:39pm · Like

    Kumar Suryavanshi
    bahut khoob:-)
    September 16 at 11:44pm · Like

    Irshad Kamil ‎@ Rahul Thanks.

    @ Aslam Duaon ke liye shukriya.

    @ Parvez Bhai Hausla afzai ke liye shukriya. Dua mein yaad rakhein.
    September 16 at 11:44pm · Like · 1 person

    Avi Upadhyay
    sorry sir but last 2 lines samj ni aayi hai :((…
    Bt mai rooh ki baatien liye line is amazin… Ma favourate….
    September 16 at 11:45pm via Facebook Mobile · Like

    Shayad Shrikant
    Kya Khoob…कि मैं कभी कुरआन से बाहर नहीं आता.. Khoob mukammal Ghazal Irshad bhai..
    September 16 at 11:48pm · Like

    DrMrunalinni Patil
    AWESOME , INTENSE AND SO MANY SHADES TO THE POEM RARE GEM OF YOUR POETRY COLLECTION .PAIN STRENGTH…. NEENDSE PEHLE KI YAAD AAYI AAJ…Dil dard ke lagan se bahar nahin aata
    Ye karz hai kisaan se bahar nahin aata
    APRATIM APRATIM …aakhiri sh…See More
    September 16 at 11:53pm · Like · 1 person

    Abdul Vahab Mohammed
    saadgi se apni baat kehna koi aapse seekhe sir…..khoob,bhaut umda
    September 16 at 11:54pm via Facebook Mobile · Like

    Smr Iti
    Irshadji – bahut khoob. Ismein to lagbhag har lafz teer ki tarah hai…teekha hai par bhetereen hai.
    September 16 at 11:55pm via Facebook Mobile · Like

    DrMrunalinni Patil
    waiting for you gurinder ji to elaborate the poem…
    September 17 at 12:01am · Like

    Mehnaz Javed
    beshak akhari shair her ek ki zindgi ki haqeeqat hai kya baat kehi hai aapne
    September 17 at 12:02am via Facebook Mobile · Like

    Irshad Kamil ‎@ Thanks Kumar.

    @ Avi kabhi kabhi poetry ke liye thoda sa dimag pe zor dena padta hai…koshish karo…nahin samajh aaya to explain kar dunga.

    @ Thanks Dr Sa’b as said to AVI…wil explain later….tilll then try once again.

    @ Shrikant Mohabbat ke liye shukriya.

    @ Vahab Sa’b ‘Hum sada tabiyat logon ka kya sajna sanwarna sahib ji’

    @ Smriti shukriya, sab tareef allah ki.
    September 17 at 12:06am · Like

    Irshad Kamil ‎@ Mehnaz Bhabi Shukriya…Zindagi ki Haqeeqat samajhna hi thoda mushkil hota hai…right na?
    September 17 at 12:08am · Like

    Afshan Shafiq Hussein
    Touched the heart immensely……behtreen n lajawab…
    September 17 at 12:13am via Facebook Mobile · Like

    Bharat Tiwari
    बेफ़िक्रियाँ ख़रीद के “कामिल” औलाद की
    बेफ़िकर मैं दुकान से बाहर नहीं आता….. waah
    kahan aasan hai befikr wapas aana …. aulad ki fikr kahan khatm hongi kamil saheb….
    September 17 at 12:24am · Like

    Irshad Kamil ‎@ Thanks afshan Jo @ Yup Bharat.
    September 17 at 12:44am · Like

    Amal Donwaar
    मैं रूह की बातें लिये दहलीज़ पे खड़ा…तू जिस्म के मकान से बाहर नहीं आता…

    Itna hi kya kam tha ki yeh bhi arz kar diya…

    तू क़त्ल कर कसूर ना मेरा मुझे बता…कि मैं कभी कुरआन से बाहर नहीं आता…

    Bahut khoob… 🙂
    September 17 at 12:50am · Like

    Gurinder Singh Azad
    Great bro. मैंने इसे घूँट घूँट पिया है. इस ग़ज़ल में आतम-मंथन, शिकवों, दरपेश हकीक़तों, कशमकश और इन सबके चलते इंसानी मानसिकता सब कुछ है. आप शायरी खुद हिमालय हैं. लेकिन आपकी शायरी में सेहरा, समुंदर सब कुछ है. इस व्यापकता से मैं बहुत सकारातमक रूप से हैरान हूँ.

    जो लफ्ज़ तार तार सा होंठों पे है बिछा
    वो तीर है कमान से बाहर नहीं आता

    मैंने इस शेर को कई मरतबा पढ़ा है.
    रात का एक बजा है और आपकी ग़ज़ल ने मेरी थकी आँखों के किवाड़ पूरे खोल दिए हैं, झुकी हुयी पीठ सीढ़ी कर दी है, और ज़हन के खड़े पानी में लहरें उठा दी हैं…. आपकी सोच और बुलंद शायरी को मेरे इस ग़ज़ल के सच्चे शब्दों सरीखे ढेरों सलाम मेरे भाई !!
    September 17 at 1:08am · Like · 1 person

    Spandan Pandey मैं रूह की बातें लिये दहलीज़ पे खड़ा

    तू जिस्म के मकान से बाहर नहीं आता

    bahot khoob irshad bhai. ye sher humare dil ko chhoo gaya. matla bhi naye andaz ka hai.god bless
    September 17 at 1:15am · Like

    DrMrunalinni Patil ‎
    @gurinderji thanx a lot i was waiting for your elaboration…:)
    September 17 at 1:25am · Like

    Shakti Barthwal
    sir…maza aa gaya….
    Taarifon ke liye yun toh shabd hain bahut …Par kinn shabdon ko chunu, samajh mein nahin aata……..
    September 17 at 1:54am · Like

    Ratan Chand ‘Ratnesh’
    खुद में ही रहता है गुमसुम, वो शख्स अपने मकान से बाहर नहीं आता…
    September 17 at 6:23am · Like

    Atul Arora
    vo kalam hokar kalam hi ko bo raha hai
    tu beej hokar beej se baahar nahin aata
    September 17 at 7:11am · Like

    Shadab Ghani
    bahut khob
    September 17 at 7:54am · Like

    Avi Upadhyay
    kk sir…. waitin for ur explaination….:)).. pardon me, sir m nt able to interpret..
    September 17 at 8:02am via Facebook Mobile · Like

    Imran Khan
    Loot liya sir ji apne…….hala ki poemm hai Bahar nahin aata….agar yeh khayal apka , apke zehen se bahar nahi aata toh hamarii bohott badi lose hoti ji, its awesomee
    September 17 at 8:21am · Like

    Zareef Ahmed
    तू क़त्ल कर कसूर ना मेरा मुझे बता
    कि मैं कभी कुरआन से बाहर नहीं आता

    बेफ़िक्रियाँ ख़रीद के “कामिल” औलाद की
    बेफ़िकर मैं दुकान से बाहर नहीं आता ….

    After a long time… instant Wah from my lips.. thanks
    September 17 at 8:21am · Like · 1 person

    Zafar Irshad
    Maza aa gaya Irshad ji…Aapki shayri kamal ki hai….khobsurat…
    September 17 at 8:53am · Like

    Ish Madhu Talwar
    irshad bhaai, yah gazal seedhe dil par chot karti hai…hamaari dua hai k aap aise hi kalam se lafzon ka jharna bahaate rahin aur log unmein dubkiyaann lagaate rahein…
    September 17 at 9:38am · Like

    Madhurjya Baruah
    beautiful irshad ji…..
    September 17 at 10:07am · Like

    Arnab Goswami
    Irshad ji, Matla is just awesome and the ashar #2,4,5 are great…Deep philosophy and balanced poetry is a recipe for wonderful ghazal… Keep it up..
    September 17 at 10:51am · Like

    Sumie Neesha
    wah..
    September 17 at 10:56am · Like

    Rutuja Athalye Kathe
    Excellent…every couplet is full of philosophy of life and its still too much entertaining. Amazing work Irshad ji…WHAT I GUESS FROM LAST COUPLET is…this world is like BIG shop…if i buy happiness or tension free life for my near n dear ones by doing wrong or by compromises then those wrongs n compromises put burden on my my Mind. Coz i m answerable to God. Am i write Irshad Ji?
    September 17 at 11:37am · Like

    Ashwin Eshan
    bahut khoob…aapke gaano ke beech yeh gazal maano sitaaron ke beech poonam ka chaand..
    September 17 at 11:51am · Like

    Atifa Khan
    wah bhaijaan wah
    September 17 at 11:51am · Like

    Kazima Khan
    Wah ji Wah…Bahut khoob…behtreen hai… I like RUTUJA what u explained…very widely explained…one interpretation can be ‘how i will pay back the debts of this shop from where i m buying happiness for my children’…Irshad ji wil expla…See More
    September 17 at 12:21pm · Like · 1 person

    Parminder Kumar MAASHAALLAH!!…Kitne Rang Hain Is Ghazal Mein!!…Saaton Rang Hain!!…Har Rang Khoobsurat!!…Mukkammil Ghazal…Kya She’r Hai “Tu Jism Ke Makaan Se Bahar Nahin Aata”…Aur “Main Qur’aan se Bahar Nahin Aata” Wah!!…Kitna Achha Bayaan Kiya Hai Isalami Samaj Ka Dard!!…Makhta Bhi Khoob Hai…Har Insaan Apne Bachchon Ke liye Khud Ko Roz Bechta Hai…WAH!!…
    September 17 at 12:27pm · Like

    Khalid Khan
    Irshad sb..as usual simple n thtful..is ghazal ka matla hi bahut khubsurat hai jo daurehazir ki akkasi bhi hai..
    I second Mumtaz mam..mera bhi pasandida sheir yahi hai…
    मैं रूह की बातें लिये दहलीज़ पे खड़ा

    तू जिस्म के मकान से बाहर नहीं आता…..See More
    September 17 at 12:57pm · Like

    Seema Sharma Vashistha
    irshaadji kya khoob likhte hain aap…mere paas toh taarif ke liye bhi shabd nahi hain!!..last lines r too gud!…behtareen! bemisaal!!
    September 17 at 1:44pm · Like

    Shailesh Pratap Singh
    मैं रूह की बातें लिये दहलीज़ पे खड़ा…तू जिस्म के मकान से बाहर नहीं आता……
    ” Khuda ne bakshi hai tujhe jo funkaari Kamil…Koi Harf tere Kalam ka bezubaan nahi aata’ bahut Ummda Bhai…Bahut accha ..maza aa gaya!!
    September 17 at 1:50pm · Like

    Irshad Kamil ‎
    @ Amal Allah jab deta to hamara daman nahin apni dariyadili dekhta hai…hai na:-)

    @ Gurinder Bhai hamesha ki tarah tashreeh ke liye shukriya.

    @ Sapandan behad shukriya.

    @ Shakti dua kar Allah kuchh aur inayat kare.

    @ Ratnesh ji…@ Atul sir aap dono ne kamaal silsila badhaya hai…bahut khoob.

    @ Shadab Thanks.

    @ Imran ‘Main loot ke bhi khali haath hun…Tum lut ke bhi malamaal”

    @ Zareef bhai…meri Aah pe… Wah ke liye shukriya…
    September 17 at 3:12pm · Like

    Harpreet Kaur Azad
    Its a MASTER PIECE Irshad ji! Wonderful… After a long wait… but it was worth the wait…
    September 17 at 3:14pm · Like · 1 person

    Irshad Kamil ‎
    @ Zafar Sa’b i m humbled.

    @Ish ji duaon ke liye shukriya.

    @ Madhurjya thanks.

    @Arnab thanks for liking few ashar.

    @ Sumie THNX

    @ Rutuja u really explained very well. Very nice…I am happy that u are understand poetry so well. U really surprised me. Khudos.

    @Ashwin Geet ho ya Gazal sab apne he bete betiyan hain.

    @ Atifa Ma’am mere page pe aane ke liye aur comment karne ke liye aapka bahut bahut shukriya.

    @Kazima you are very gud in ur explaination. U and Rutuja explained the last sh’er truly well. thank u to both.

    @ Parminder babu bade dino baad dikhai diye…sab theek?
    September 17 at 3:23pm · Like

    Irshad Kamil
    ‎@ Khalid Sa’b ‘sada insaan sada hi to likhega sir:-)

    @ Seema ji main to wahi likhta hun jo mujhe likhna aata hai…lekin aapki tareef usey khoob bana deti hai…shukriya

    @Shailesh ‘sab Funkaar Mohabbat ke”

    @Advocate sa’b Khushamdeed.
    September 17 at 3:27pm · Like

    DrMrunalinni Patil
    i did try to feel the last sher .. what i understood is while i buy peace n joy for my loved ones i never return without worries..hope iam somewhere appropriate shayar sa’b…
    September 17 at 4:47pm · Like

    Reena Pareek
    bahut khoob kamil sahab …agar jagjeet ji gaa den toh mukammal ho jaye …..
    September 17 at 5:28pm · Like

    Runjhun Sharma
    its a lovely creation by irshad ji . he is day by day surprising us with his talent . this one was a sweet change fro movie songs. i liked the ghazal. wish he gives us more good songs and ghazals .
    September 17 at 5:58pm · Like

    Rutuja Athalye Kathe
    ‎* Irshadji, Thanks a ton…m blissful to know dat u r happy & surprised…………
    it’s so excellent & wonderful that my appreciation was my spontaneous reaction…
    September 17 at 6:20pm · Like

    Kavita Palsekar
    lajawab, astonishing ghazal sir.
    September 17 at 9:18pm · Like

    Uddeept Dutt Gaur Bhai
    for you…
    मैं अपने फ़ैसले को बदल भी दूँ मगर तू
    अपने दिए बयान से बाहर नहीं आता
    ….
    Great sir…
    September 18 at 6:57am · Like

    Neelam Jha
    kya baat hai irshadji…bahut khoob…
    September 18 at 3:54pm · Like

    BK Manish Damn!!
    Its almost a classic ghazal.
    While you hv resorted to some cliche yet done wonders soon after.
    Wordplay is irritating (even sm methaphor) at a few points but equally noteworthy is usage of ‘waah-waahiyan’ and ‘lafj taar taar sa’. This ghazal definitely deserves several careful readings.
    “Shabd-Shakti” ka poora paath yaad aane lagaa mujhe.
    Have problems with ‘haasil-e-ghazal’ couplet though…something about its structure is not quite right…can’t point now…but u surely get the drift.

    @Rutuja- u did surprise me. Plesantly.
    September 18 at 4:01pm · Like

    Jharna Biswas
    kya khub kamil saab…bahat hii khubsurat…01 mein meine kuchh likha thaa, apki pangti mein woh yaad dilaya fir…usika link ihan…aap paRenge to bahat khushi hogi…
    September 18 at 7:15pm · Like

    Garima Srivastav
    Vidambanaaon aur seemaaon mein fhase vyaktiyon ki samvedna ko behtar dhang se prastut kiyaa hai…jakdan is kadar hai ki bahar nikalne ki chatpatahat nahin dikhayee deti…bhartiya samaaj ki yahi sacchayee hai ki bandhanon ka gyaan to hai nikalne ki tadap nahin…yahi wajah hai ki aazaadi ke 6 dashakon baad bhi na to takatvar netritva hai aur na hi majboot aandolan…kisaan karz se bahar aaye bhi to kaise…uski chatpatahat haasya vayag mein tabdeel ho chuki hai jaise” peepli live’…sach baat ye hai ki teer ko dhanush tak laane ke liye anyaay ke virudh seene mein aag ka dhadhakna zaroori hai…aise daur mein jab tathakathit mahapurush joota aur chatni bechte nazar aa rahe hain tab yugantar ki ummeed divaswapn hi hai…aise mein jaagarook vyakti befikar reh hi nahin sakta- dukhiya das kabir hai jaage aur roye…
    September 19 at 10:19am · Like

    Irm Zafar Wah bahut khoob, ek aur taj mehal.
    September 20 at 1:10am · Like

    Ajay Kanagat
    murda kabristan se bahar nahin aata, kya kehne/ aise hi aachi shayari karte rahiye aap kamyabi ki bulandiyon pe pahunchenge.
    September 20 at 9:06pm · Like · 1 person

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